6 words.
"Wow! Is this a weave?"
"no."
25 words.
"What are you?"
"What do you mean?"
"What are you."
"black"
"You can't be. You don't look like me"
"Well...race is a social construct."
Authors note: So both of these stories are two conversations I have literally had to go through, unfortunately. The first story is something that happened to me for the first time in the third grade, verbatim... LOL. I had to tweak the second one a little bit to get exactly 25 words, which was a little tough.
PS: I am not biracial. I'm second gen. Ethiopian so this is a story of dual Identity
Inspo
"Wow! Is this a weave?"
"no."
25 words.
"What are you?"
"What do you mean?"
"What are you."
"black"
"You can't be. You don't look like me"
"Well...race is a social construct."
Authors note: So both of these stories are two conversations I have literally had to go through, unfortunately. The first story is something that happened to me for the first time in the third grade, verbatim... LOL. I had to tweak the second one a little bit to get exactly 25 words, which was a little tough.
PS: I am not biracial. I'm second gen. Ethiopian so this is a story of dual Identity
Inspo
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Hey Ida!
ReplyDeleteThis was a really cool idea. I really liked how you drew from your own experience to create these microfiction stories. I liked how the topic itself is a bit sad and disappointing that you have to go through these conversations over and over again, but you still kept the tone relatively light! I know they came from real-life experience, but it was impressive how the reality of it came through in writing. Keep it up!
Hey Ida,
ReplyDeleteI liked your use of dialogue! I personally did not use much in mine as I was afraid of whether or not I could incorporate it well, but I feel that, after reading your way of doing it, it gave me more confidence on being able to utilize it myself, because you made it seem really effective in your story!
Hey Ida,
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you worked at the 25 word story. It turned out well. Both of these stories are something I would be interested in assigning for close reading essays. I liked how you went with a lowercase "no." as your response in the first story. That lower case 'n' gives the impression of a squint and the basic punctuation came across as some serious side-eye; end-of-conversation.
Well done. Thanks for sharing!
-Eden
Hey Ida, I liked how you used your own experiences as inspiration to writing your story. I liked how you used dialogue and usage of punctuation and uppercase and lowercase letter to express the form of speech or the tone of voice used by the characters. While the questions were always capitalized and used punctuation the answers were always such states. Maybe because I have gone through similar experiences, as I was reading your microfictions I read it in the tone of voice I imagined based on your form of writing. Next time I would give the stories a title or something to emphasize the end of one story and the start of the other as I was a little confused at first and originally thought it was one story but it was good that you mentioned there being two in your author's note. Other than that small thing, I enjoyed your stories keep up the good work!
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