I look closer to see my reflection. It's not an ordinary reflection, though. "Those that have drunk from here have died because they didn't acknowledge my question."
"What do you mean? my reflection is what killed my brothers?"
I took a step back to digest. It was like I could feel the blood rushing through my head. I dropped to my knees and stared at my reflection in disbelief. I can't believe they were truly gone.
"no," the reflection said. "I take a familiar face, and make you see the questions within, and understand the world around you"
I was confused. But still, I answered. I answered every question that that was asked of me by whatever spirit was calling. Every riddle, every rhyme, hoping that my reward would be my beloved brothers return from an undeserving death.
Once I finished with the questions, none other than Dharma came out when the real character was revealed.
I begged and pleaded for my brothers to return when he pronounced that I should be granted one wish. But Dharm wouldn't budge. Because I had the patience to answer the riddles of the lake, I should be the one, and the only one, to reap the benefits of my patience and of my knowledge.
What Dharma didn't understand, though, was that my brothers were a huge part of my life. We were in exile for so many years together, and we survived. We survived! Only to be taken away by the test of the lake. I couldn't let that happen. I wouldn't. I didn't change my wish, and I kept asking because that is all that I wanted in this world. When I explained this to Dharma. He agreed. and after hours of putting in my point of view, Dharma finally granted me my wish and gave my brothers back to me.
Author's note:
I had a lot of fun writing this story! I wanted to make it a little different by doing it in the first person so that we fully understand the pain he went through when he found out his brother was killed.
"What do you mean? my reflection is what killed my brothers?"
I took a step back to digest. It was like I could feel the blood rushing through my head. I dropped to my knees and stared at my reflection in disbelief. I can't believe they were truly gone.
"no," the reflection said. "I take a familiar face, and make you see the questions within, and understand the world around you"
I was confused. But still, I answered. I answered every question that that was asked of me by whatever spirit was calling. Every riddle, every rhyme, hoping that my reward would be my beloved brothers return from an undeserving death.
Once I finished with the questions, none other than Dharma came out when the real character was revealed.
I begged and pleaded for my brothers to return when he pronounced that I should be granted one wish. But Dharm wouldn't budge. Because I had the patience to answer the riddles of the lake, I should be the one, and the only one, to reap the benefits of my patience and of my knowledge.
What Dharma didn't understand, though, was that my brothers were a huge part of my life. We were in exile for so many years together, and we survived. We survived! Only to be taken away by the test of the lake. I couldn't let that happen. I wouldn't. I didn't change my wish, and I kept asking because that is all that I wanted in this world. When I explained this to Dharma. He agreed. and after hours of putting in my point of view, Dharma finally granted me my wish and gave my brothers back to me.
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Author's note:
I had a lot of fun writing this story! I wanted to make it a little different by doing it in the first person so that we fully understand the pain he went through when he found out his brother was killed.
I am writing my next story over this one!! I feels like the deathly hallow story from harry potter!! I love you added dialogue that adds some variety in your story. I also really like your style of writing. It is very fun to read. The riddle part makes me think of the hobbit so it is a weird mash up of these two stories I love great job!
ReplyDeleteHi Ida! This was such a lovely story with really beautiful writing. You took the original and made it so emotional, which can be difficult to do. The last paragraph clearly shows the persistence of the brother and how much grief he was experiencing. I definitely felt more for the brothers when reading your version than I did when reading the original. Great job!
ReplyDeleteHey Ida! I liked what you did with the story. I don't remember the original exactly, but this made me want to go back and read it. I liked the ending the most- it shows just how much the brother cares for his family. He has dedication!
ReplyDeleteOne thing I questioned was the first line, why wasn't his reflection ordinary? Is it because of the lake or because of his face? I just wanted to know that detail!